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  • Caryl

    That’s hilarious! I used to work for a woman who insisted on using the word “utilize” instead of “use” in every single instance. Drove me nuts!

  • http://kathrynpackerroberts.blogspot.com Kathryn Roberts

    This is great. I always prefer to read something in English.

  • http://www.adventuresintheordinary.com/ Jacquelyn Sill

    I think my son, who is a third year English Literature major could benefit from this cartoon and advice. Wow…that was extremely loutish of me. I didn’t envisage that I could be so sanctimonious of my offspring.

  • Jeanne

    Love the reminder to speak English, not high fallutin’ language.

  • http://www.pointsofprue.com Prue

    K.I.S.S works for business writing too. Keeping it simple in documents, presentations and email leads to greater comprehension and less misunderstanding.
    If only people stuck to it.

  • http://www.blogger.com/profile/06909176210194176373 Sarah

    Sesquipedalian is one of my favorite words. I could repeat it over and over- just like Hobbes saying “quark.”

    But while it’s a fun word to say, it’s a horrible way to speak. Thanks for the laugh.

  • http://www.wizardofotin.blogspot.com otin

    Yea, I am guilty of that sometimes. In one line I said that a person had “the overwhelming urge to urinate.” My girlfriend said, ” you could have just simply said she had to pee.” lol

    • http://www.bkjackson.blogspot.com BK Jackson

      RE: Words like “urinate”–guess it depends on your frame of reference. Coming from a healthcare background, I wouldn’t even bat an eyelash at that usage, unless it was completely out of keeping with the character.

      • Rachelle Gardner

        Hopefully you WOULD bat an eyelash at the use of that word in a non-medical setting, or coming from a non-medical person!

  • http://www.byannabanks.blogspot.com Anna Banks

    This is true EXCEPT that recently I switched to Marilyn Monroe blonde for the summer (and loved it, BTW), and people kept treating me like a ditz. Talking down to me. Seriously. I had no idea the “dumb blonde” stereotype still existed. So, I had to reply to their stupidity with words they could not define, let alone spell. And I LIKED it. Don’t judge me.

    But otherwise, I agree. I say things like “Y’all” and “Simmer down, skillet” all the time, unless provoked. :)

    • http://www.colindsmith.com/blog Colin Smith

      “Simmer down, skillet!” LOL–I’ve not heard that one before! That’s cute. I’ll have to remember that one. I had a co-worker that used to say “what’s the deal, pickle?” whenever I needed to discuss something. Deal-Pickle… it took me a moment to get it. I suppose it helps if you live in the South. :)

    • http://jilldomschot.blogspot.com Jill

      Oh, so that’s how the reply feature works. I guess I’m a dumb blonde, after all.
      Okay, I had the opposite experience. Being blonde all my life, I didn’t realize how poorly people treated me until I dyed my hair red. I thought my shyness or femaleness caused the general lack of respect. But the condescension magically ceased when my hair was red. Weird, isn’t it?

  • http://www.bkjackson.blogspot.com BK Jackson

    Timely post as I recently read a novel where there were a ton of $10 words. I like to be challenged to go to my dictionary once or twice in a novel to look something up. But if you’re reading and it feels like the author sat at his computer with a synonym finder in reach, trying to find the most complex words for the simplest sentences, it makes you want to throw in the towel.

    I did manage to finish the book, but it wasn’t easy, and I would not be in too much of a hurry to read another work by this author–though I’d probably give them the benefit of the doubt because I believe it was their first book. No doubt they’ve gotten feedback on the issue.

  • http://www.frankdicesare.wordpress.com Frank DiCesare

    As an writer and editor, nothing irks me more than writers who use a sesquipedalian word in the middle of sentence that contains one- and two-syllable words. More often than not big words disrupt the rhythm of an otherwise well-written sentence.

    It has also been my experience that writers who use big words in simple sentences are typically the worst storytellers. They use big words to mask the fact that they do not know the fundamentals of good storytelling. It’s the writing equivalent to the bad golfer who insists on playing with the best clubs but refuses to take lessons.

  • http://reflectionsbykrista.blogspot.com Krista Phillips

    My mom and I used to joke that some authors would scour the dictionary for a big word they really liked, then try to insert it in their novel as much as possible to make them sound smart.

    I haven’t seen that nearly so much in the last five – ten years or so, thank goodness!

  • http://www.abingdonpress.com/fiction Ramona Richards

    Love this. I asked a former editor about this tendency, especially among young, academic writers. He said, “Amazing, isn’t it, that they feel the need to demonstate 8 years of college in one paragraph?”

  • Irene

    Wow, thank you!

    Unmitigee… mitigah…

    The best writing lesson I ever learned: use ten-dollar words at your own peril, as it’s easier for a reader to throw your book against the wall than to reach for a dictionary.

  • http://www.colindsmith.com/blog Colin Smith

    I wonder if the temptation for an author to flash his vocabulary credentials comes, at least in part, from the fact that so many classic novels were written at a time when long words were part-and-parcel of written communication. In other words, we think that to write a classic novel, we have to adopt 19th century vocabulary.

    My brothers and I used to enjoy (and still do) playing with language, and finding convoluted ways to say simple things, so I appreciate the well-chosen word. But the “well-chosen word” isn’t necessarily 15 syllables long. I was recently struggling over a good way to describe a character falling hard on her posterior. After numerous attempts, I settled on “she fell butt first.” I though the simplicity and “bounce” of the words made me feel the action more than any of the more eloquent alternatives.

  • http://brickabrackandbaubles.blogspot.com BJ

    How well timed, I’m reading a book right now called “The Book of Flying” and it is full of this sort of thing. The book is heavy on poems from the character as well though so it works here, but barely.

  • http://babblefromtheburbs.blogspot.com/ Kathryn Elliott

    Funny!

  • Loree Huebner

    Too funny.

  • http://mauzewriting.wordpress.com Rebecca Monaco

    That’s brilliant, and completely true. There’s a difference between clever word usage and ridiculous word usage.

  • http://www.napkindad.com Marty Coleman, The Napkin Dad

    Thanks everyone, I love all the responses! It took me quite a while to come up with the sesquipedalian phraseology for ‘I think he’s dead’. It was harder than you thi…I mean logicalize.

  • http://crowproductions.com joan Cimyotte

    The above animation brought out the joyous response of hilarity. I do believe it to be a fine example of sardonic behavior by the writer. I feel fantastically like the potentate, exasperatingly so.

  • http://www.proverbs31gal.blogspot.com/ Debbie Baskin

    Too cute!

  • http://lauraplusthevoices.blogspot.com Laura W.

    So effing true! Drat those Latinate words!!!

  • http://stillinsists.blogspot.com Constant Writer

    We used to talk like this in high school because nobody else knew how to talk consistently with such big words. I love using big words when I can but not in speech. Nobody’s going to look up a word while you’re talking, but if they’re reading it, they might bother to look it up if they find it interesting enough.

  • http://melanieksantiago.blogpost.com Melanie

    So is it bad that my 5 year old daughters are using words like famished and satiated instead of starving and full? :D

  • http://www.peterdehaan.name Peter DeHaan

    When writing my dissertation, I purposely begin using bigger, more academic sounding words instead of smaller, simpler ones.

    I think that effort was both expected and rewarded.

    Unfortunately, I sometimes fall back into that habit.

  • Reba J. Hoffman

    And I won’t even go into cultural phrases like, “well ain’t that a kicker?!” and “that’s so funny it makes ya want to slap yer mama!”
    :-)

  • http://www.awomansview.typepad.com Lenore Buth

    Love it. Early in my writing career I read the advice to never use a five-dollar word when a nickel one would do. I write that way.

    I found the downside is that apparently one can come across as too blunt.

    My pet peeve in novels is the French word, frisson. It crops up so often I’ve wondered if that’s the new “must” word. Every time it sounds out of place with the rest of the book. My guess is it’s thought to add a touch-of-class to the book.

    But then, I write (blunt) nonfiction.

  • http://www.examiner.com/childrens-literature-in-chicago/elizabeth-mackinney Beth MacKinney

    It’s like that line from the Rocketeer:

    “Acting is acting like you’re not acting.”

    So is writing.

  • Taz

    I once read a novel on one hand a carried a dictionary in the other.

  • http://www.teresaleewatson.com/ Teresa Watson

    Bente Gallagher shared this with me this morning. I desperately needed a good laugh this morning! I just started working as a freelance editor. Last night, I read a prologue for a writer who was using words I had never heard of before, and using words in a different way than they were intended. He said they were properly used and that obviously I was not the editor for him. He left me questioning my decision to go into editing, until Bente showed me this cartoon. Thank you for sharing it!

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